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Cold

black
empty



like the cavern where crimson vellum once resided


Drenched in reticence,
your empty blue eyes do nothing
but freeze the blood in these veins

surrounded by phantoms,
i lie in the dark next to your fading silhouette
between sheets that hold so many memories,
they are empty,

like the chestnut eyes that bore into yours


And as the rain              
falls
harder

as it
falls
faster


washing down the streets
through deep alleys,
down endless roads,

for

once



just


once





i pray it takes me with
let the droplets break the silence
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for once by ~jhock216 The suggester writes, "Through rich language and engaging formatting, the author pulls the reader into a brief yet poignant moment." ( Suggested by LadyofGaerdon and Featured by thorns )
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lelvigen Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2013
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KCsummerz Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
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afterthevoid Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013
Powerful, stacking the words cold, black, empty like that at the beginning really sets the tone for the rest of the piece :) Great work.
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Motion-Music Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013
Was this written by a 12 year old?

cold, black, empty . . . . wow . . . how original and thought provoking (sarcasm intended)
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averrose Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Love your formatting! So many good poems could be great with the right layout, and the already-great ones become DD's. :) Well done!
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SpookybooPuddleglum Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Student General Artist
beautiful and sad
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Narcaholic Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Student
Lovely (:
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OMGitsgreen Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013
Stunning :clap:
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ohanlon Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Professional Writer
oh dear. sorry but you should have just made it crimson blood bro. and those cliffs made my eyes fall off too many times i cant take it anymore. i got to the end of this thing and all i could think was.......i was already here why did i take this 360 journey??
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Anna-95 Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is like... me. Indcredibly well-written, congrats on the DD!
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